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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter, say which part-time course you booked explain why you need to cancel your booking ask about booking a different course

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Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Sameer Rana, currently enrolled
for
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upcoming
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the upcoming
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 summer batch of
“Python
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the “Python
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programming
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” part-time course. I am writing to withdraw my enrollment from
aforementioned
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program
due to
unplanned
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an unplanned
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 change in my
work
 schedule. To explain
further
, I am working as a part-time cable technician at
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, my
work
 schedule for
coming
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the coming
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 summer was changed by my employer and I am expected to
work
 full-time.
In addition
, maybe I would be required to
work
 overtime. Now,
due to
this
 sudden change in
work-life
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, I feel I would not be able to attend the part-time classes at your college.
Moreover
, it is important to note that
last
 night
while
 searching for another part-time
program
 at your college, I came to know about “Computer networking” classes. I noted that
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 of
this
program
 is comparatively less than
“Python
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the “Python
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 programming”
program
.
Furthermore
,
this
program
also
 offers recorded video lectures, which I can watch at my convenience. Based on the current situation, I would like to request you to switch my
program
 to “Computer networking”. I hope you understand my situation and will accommodate my request in the best way. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Sameer Rana
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Ensure a clear and logical structure throughout your letter. Organize your ideas into separate paragraphs, and use linking words to connect these ideas smoothly.
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Maintain a formal tone suitable for the context of the letter. Use formal salutations and closings, and avoid using contractions or colloquial language.
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Be specific in your request and reasons for cancellation. Provide clear explanations and politely request for any alternatives or solutions.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Part-time course
  • Cancellation
  • Booking
  • Administrator
  • Financial situation
  • Work commitments
  • Health issues
  • Inconvenience
  • Transfer
  • Subject area
  • Schedule
  • Format
  • Cancellation policy
  • Refund process
  • Assistance
  • Understanding
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