Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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training facilities
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athletes
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trainings
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training
pieces of training
athletes
.
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wins
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countries
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athletes
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international
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and international
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goverments
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in encouraging
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enhance
trainings
and exercises.
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facilities
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more
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is more
excercise
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exercise
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should
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that should
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be developed
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areas
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pollutants
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healthy Correct article usage
a
life-style
in communities. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
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a desire Change the verb form
have
cycling
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to cycle
facilities
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using
their vehicles.
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to
for
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to
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apply
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encourged
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playing
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