The pie chart show what makes people most happy for two different age groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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A glance at the pie charts provided the percentages of what makes two different

age

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groups

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of people happy.The

age

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groups

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are individuals who are under 30 years old and over 30 years old.

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,the vast majority of people feel happy because of achievement at work no matter what

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they are, whilst the fewest of them are happy

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other factors in the two

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the information shown in the charts, achievement at work brings about happiness for 21% of youngsters under 30 and 32% of people over 30.

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, doing hobbies contributes to 24% of those who are over 30 feeling happy and 22% of those younger ones having the same feeling. What should be particularly mentioned is that there are some different factors that lead to pleasant emotions in the two

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groups

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such

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as having a good appearance and travelling for young ones who are over 30 and financial security and being with family for older ones. 18% of the youngsters are cheerful with good appearances and 15% of them are pleasant to travel.

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, one-fifth of those who are over 30 are satisfied with financial security and 14% of them feel happy to be with family members.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

205 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

illustrates
contributing factors
distinct age groups
primary sources
comprising
leading contributors
predominant
accounting for
underscores contrasts
prioritize
universal aspects of well-being
engaging in enjoyable activities
source of joy

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The pie chart show what makes people most happy for two different age groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people argue that we should do research into their family history. Others, agree with the view that we should focus on the present and future generations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Describe one or two leadership, community and/or learning & development activities that you have engaged in.

Some claim that children are more aware of environmental issues than older adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With traffic jams and pollution increasing every year in big cities, some people say that public transport should be free in big cities to help reduce these problems which are caused by cars.To what extent do you agree or disagree?