The pie chart show what makes people most happy for two different age groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the pie charts provided the percentages of what makes two different
age
groups
of people happy.The age
groups
are individuals who are under 30 years old and over 30 years old.
Overall
,the vast majority of people feel happy because of achievement at work no matter what age
they are, whilst the fewest of them are happy due to
other factors in the two groups
.
According to
the information shown in the charts, achievement at work brings about happiness for 21% of youngsters under 30 and 32% of people over 30.Moreover
, doing hobbies contributes to 24% of those who are over 30 feeling happy and 22% of those younger ones having the same feeling. What should be particularly mentioned is that there are some different factors that lead to pleasant emotions in the two age
groups
such
as having a good appearance and travelling for young ones who are over 30 and financial security and being with family for older ones. 18% of the youngsters are cheerful with good appearances and 15% of them are pleasant to travel. By contrast
, one-fifth of those who are over 30 are satisfied with financial security and 14% of them feel happy to be with family members.Submitted by s99104032 on
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