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The Chart Below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian Cities.

The Chart Below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian Cities.
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The provided bar chart illustrates the result of a survey about people’s
coffee
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 and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian
Cities
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.
Overall
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, in the
last
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 four weeks, in those
Cities
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, people who went to the cafe for
coffee
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 or tea have been more dominant than the other 2 categories except in Adelaide.
Besides
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, the habit of buying fresh
coffee
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 is nonessential.
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, more than 60% of city residents of three
cities
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 have a behavior of drinking at cafes which are 61% in Sydney, 63% in Melbourne, and 62% in Hobart. Even though drinking at a cafe is still the
favorite
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favourite
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 in Hobart, the instant
coffee
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-buying rate is
also
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 high, with approximately
in
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54% of the people. Those numbers indicate that the consumption rate of
coffee
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 or tea is high in Hobart.
On the other hand
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, Brisbane and Adelaide have the very least purchases of fresh
coffee
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 habit. The Fresh
coffee
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 grocery only makes up less than 35% of the residents.
To Conclude
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, in five Australian big
cities
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, drinking behaviour was dominant with drinking at the cafe and self-made
coffee
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 is still unfavourable either fresh or instant
coffee
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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