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Some people think that university should not provide theoretical knowledge, but give practical training that is beneficial to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In modern days,
the
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 large number of people believe that
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university
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universities
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 should give practical training that has many
benefit
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benefits
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 to society
whereas
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 others think that
improve
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 theoretical knowledge is beneficial
some
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for some
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 majors
such
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 as technology and science. In my opinion,
university
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programm
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programs
 has to
equal
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 in both of
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this statement
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these statements
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.
At
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 the
begging
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beginning
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, a lot of
jobs
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 need
to
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apply
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theoretical knowledge. The scientists do not do their research and experience with practical training they
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do their research or experience
base
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in
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on
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theory
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. And people
dicriminate
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discriminate
 between right and wrong with
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 scientist's
theory
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.
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, many
jobs
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 which are really useful for life
needed to
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 theoretical knowledge.
In addition
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, there are many students who
interested
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are interested
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 in science or
math's
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math
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 occupation the
theory
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lesson
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 is very
needful
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useful
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 for them.
On the other hand
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, there are
majority
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 of
jobs
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 which
are needed
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 practical training. If students
who
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apply
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are studying
in
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architecture or some
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 which
needed
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need
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practic
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practical
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 training,
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theory
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the theory
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 will not needed a lot. A good example of
this
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 would be, the singers and actresses or actors do not need theoretical
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lesson
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 because they do not sing or act with formula.
That
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Those
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jobs
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related
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are related
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in
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 their talent and
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practic
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practical
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 training like how to cry when they act in sad scenes.
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, there are workers who did not study in
university
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 or school they just
enroll
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their
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on their
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work place
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workplace
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 with their
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practic
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practice
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 skills.
To sum up
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,
most
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the most
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university
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universities
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 should
to
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apply
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be
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a balance
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balance
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balanced
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 between
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practic
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practical
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lesson
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lessons
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 and
theory
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lesson
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lessons
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 because all
jobs
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 do not need
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practic
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practical
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 training or
formula
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formulas
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.
Therefore
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, universities have to consider that student's future job and ability.

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Structure & Clarity
Clearly define your position in the introduction and reiterate it in the conclusion to enhance clarity and impact. This provides a stronger framework for your argument.
Logical Structure
Focus on developing a more logical structure. Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each centered around a single main idea, to improve flow and readability.
Evidence and Examples
Support your main points with more detailed examples and explanations. Specific, relevant examples strengthen your argument and make your position more convincing.
Sentence Structure
Work on the variability of sentence structures to enhance readability and maintain the reader's interest. Employ a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences.
Language Accuracy
Consider improving your grammar, vocabulary, and punctuation. Accurate use of English enhances the clarity and professionalism of your essay.
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