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Some people think that universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give more practical training throughout their courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In modern days, a large number of people believe that
universities
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 have to provide the student's
theory
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lesson
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 because that lesson is very needed for some
type
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types
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 of
work
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such
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 as science, archaeology and building
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 others think that giving practical training is useful for students to society. In my opinion, the
universities
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 both of the above-mentioned arguments should be kept in balance.
At
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 the beginning, there are many jobs which require theoretical knowledge. The
scientists
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 do not do their research or experience with
practic
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practice
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,
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however
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 they do their research or experience
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in
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theory
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. And people can discriminate between right and wrong with
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 scientist’s law.
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, many jobs which are really useful for life need theoretical knowledge.
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, there are many students who are interested in science or math, the
theory
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 lessons are very useful for their future
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On the other hand
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, there are a majority of works which are requiring practical training. If students are studying architecture or some jobs which need
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practical training, the
theory
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 will not be useful
their
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in their
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 future profession. A good example of
this
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 would be,
singer
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a singer
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 and actress or actor who
require
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requires
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to
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practical knowledge to be a good singer or actress.
Because if
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 actors act in sad movies they will not cry with formulas, they just need practical instruction like how to cry when
act
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 in a sad scene.
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, there are a lot of workers who did not study in university or school, they
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their
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work place
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workplace
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 with their practical
skill
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skills
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 and ability
of
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that
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To sum up
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, most
universities
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 have to balance between hands-on training and conceptual lessons. Ultimately, the
universities
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 should consider
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the
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 student’s future situation and improve their skills which are required in their afterlife.

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coherence cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • practical training
  • balanced approach
  • real-world skills
  • foundation
  • apply knowledge
  • field of study
  • collaborate
  • industry
  • hands-on experience
  • employability
  • job readiness
  • interests
  • career goals
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