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more and more countries are making university education completely free for their citizens. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

#countries #university #education #citizens #development
In the modern era, many
people
 believe that diverse countries
supported
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education
 fee has many benefits because everybody can study their major regardless
their
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of their
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 economic background. Personally, I believe our government have to support
university
tution
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tuition
 fees.
THere
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There
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 are several
clearly
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clear
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few
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merits of
get
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getting
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 free tuition
fee
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fees
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 to
students
. The most notable one is that every
students
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student
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 can go
university
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to university
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 and they can graduate. Some
people
 cannot enter
unversity
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university
 cause their poor economic situation and a few
students
 cannot graduate
the
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 same reason.
Secondly
, they can choose
university
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 they wish to attend. In Korea, some
people
 cannot go to the
university
 that they wish because
mostly
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most
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 excellent
university
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universities
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located
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are located
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our
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in our
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 capital city. So they choose other cities' universities cause
of
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they cannot bear the expenses
such
 as housing and
tution
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tuition
 fees.
Last
 but not least, country development is followed by
education
. Because
,
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school
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the school
a school
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 can make their student as a
specialisit
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specialist
 in promising fields
such
 as IT and medicine. In spite of the above-mentioned issues, some
people
 assert that
student
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students
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 need not any subsidy for their
university
 study. The main disadvantage is that some
students
 do not want to
graducate
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graduate
 their
university
.
For example
, in
Gernamy
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Germany
, they already practice
this
 policy
however
, few
people
 do not
graudate
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graduate
 because the school benefits are massive.
As a result
, it can
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 to waste tax.
Additionally
, a closer examination would reveal that
quality
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 of
education
 will be equal. Because
,
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 some countries
has
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have
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 different
education
 quality in accordance with tuition fees. Considering the
abovie
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above
 views, it is
celar
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clear
 that,
although
 there are some negative aspects of
nation
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 finance, the merits will continue to outweigh the demerits.
Thus
, our nation
have
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 to make policy about
this
 issue.
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structure
Make sure your introduction clearly states the topic and your opinion, and that your conclusion summarizes your main points effectively. Aim for a balance between the two sections.
logic
Ensure your essay has logical structure by organizing it into clear paragraphs - one for introduction, at least two for body (advantages and disadvantages), and one for the conclusion. Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
content
Support your main points with specific examples or explanations to strengthen your argument. Avoid general statements.
accuracy
Pay attention to spelling, grammar, and punctuation to enhance the clarity and professionalism of your writing. Consistent errors can significantly detract from your message.
cohesion
Work on the coherence of your essay by using linking words and phrases to connect your ideas within and between paragraphs more smoothly.
task response
Respond fully to all parts of the task. While you have mentioned advantages and disadvantages, make sure to explore these points in more depth and provide a more balanced discussion of both sides of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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