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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.
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The given maps compare the significant changes in the development that had taken place in the town, called Nelson, between 2000 to the present.
Overall
, it can be seen that Nelson
had
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 turned from a rural
city
 into an urban
city
 from 2000 to
nowaday
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. In 2000, Nelson had very few facilities and infrastructure. The landscape was mostly undeveloped with
the
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 number of trees and unused spaces in the town on the eastern
side
 of the
city
. There was the train station and the old market
in
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 the western
side
, and
had
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the
city
 centre in the middle of the
city
.
In addition
, the northern
side
 of the
city
 had the university and the southern
side
 had the road and the port. Today, the importance of change in the town has increased the number of buildings.
For example
, In the east, there is a new shopping mall replacing the forest, and a new covered market.
Moreover
, the western of the
city
 had a new shop replacing the old market
,
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 and
had
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a new building for the hall of residence.
In addition
, there is a new architecture for the new train station
in
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on
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 the northern
side
 of the
city
.
However
,
at
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 the south of
city
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the city
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change
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changed
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 road
for
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from
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the car
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car
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cars
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 to
the
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pedestrians for walking only, and had the restaurant ,
the
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bars and clubs.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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