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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.
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The given maps compare the significant changes in the development that had taken place in the town, called Nelson, between 2000 to the present.
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, it can be seen that Nelson
had
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 turned from a rural
city
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 into an urban
city
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 from 2000 to
nowaday
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nowadays
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. In 2000, Nelson had very few facilities and infrastructure. The landscape was mostly undeveloped with
the
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 number of trees and unused spaces in the town on the eastern
side
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 of the
city
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. There was the train station and the old market
in
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 the western
side
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, and
had
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the
city
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 centre in the middle of the
city
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.
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, the northern
side
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 of the
city
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 had the university and the southern
side
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 had the road and the port. Today, the importance of change in the town has increased the number of buildings.
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, In the east, there is a new shopping mall replacing the forest, and a new covered market.
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, the western of the
city
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 had a new shop replacing the old market
,
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 and
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a new building for the hall of residence.
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, there is a new architecture for the new train station
in
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on
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 the northern
side
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 of the
city
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.
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,
at
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in
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 the south of
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city
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the city
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change
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changed
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 road
for
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from
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the car
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car
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cars
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 to
the
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pedestrians for walking only, and had the restaurant ,
the
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bars and clubs.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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