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some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #choices
in today's world, most people think we have too many
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. technology and the internet have created many choices for us. I agree with
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 point of view that it has more advantages than disadvantages.
to begin
 with, we have many
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 to make the best decision for ourselves.
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, when we talk about shopping, there are many things to choose from that allow people to choose what is most satisfactory and suitable for their finances, from design, and price, to what suits their needs my hobbies. diversity gives individuals a sense of control, allowing them to make decisions that suit their unique needs.
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, if there are too many
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 given, you may be confused and make the wrong decision, leading to regret for later choices. and best is not the only factor for success, so it is impossible that you have made the best school that makes you relax and not try
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 because it is only a very small part of your success Friend. or when you graduate from
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 academy, you will be able to choose to go to academy or work. If you choose to go to school, you will be able to choose your favourite academy, the facilities, and the quality of teaching in your favourite profession. Among the
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 the prime may not be the best but it may be the best that suits you the most. In conclusion, whether your prime is positive or negative depends on many factors
such
 as personal preferences, efforts or opinions. But most of all, having more
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Ensure a clear introduction and conclusion are present, effectively summarizing your main points and stance on the topic. This helps readers understand your perspective right from the beginning and reinforces it at the end.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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