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Global warming causes the increase of sea levels. What is the problem may people face and possible solution

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In recent years, climate change has been a major threat to
people
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 and
this
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 has increased rapidly.
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 essay will highlight that the biggest problem of global warming is
flooding
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the flooding
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 of coastal regions and cities resulting in
displacement
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the displacement
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 of millions of
people
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 and causing property damage. Building of
floodbarries
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barriers
 will help curb
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 situation.
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 with, flooding of homes has been the principal problem
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people
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 staying around coastal areas since it causes property
demage
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damage
 and many
people
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losing
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 their shelter. Millions of
people
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 become disturbed when
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 happens since they lose everything they have own to the floods. The Pakistan flooding in 2021
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, caused
alot
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a lot
 of individuals staying around coastal areas homeless.
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,
rise
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 in sea levels results in forced migration and puts pressure on
infrastrature
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infrastructure
 in
these
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 places they settle in. There is a
suage
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surge
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stage
 in prices of items and facilities since these towns and cities become overpopulated. One possible solution is building
of
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apply
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flood
barries
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barriers
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 in
the
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apply
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coastal places
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 as dikes, dams and floodgates will solve
this
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 issue by preventing the water from reaching
the
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crowded areas. Places like that should not be left unattended since
it
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they
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causes
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cause
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 greater harm to citizens.
Holand
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Holland
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 has successfully implemented
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 measure and it has greatly benefitted them.
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, countries should learn
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 adaptive
stretagy
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strategy
 of putting measures in place to avoid
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this
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these
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 occurances. In conclusion,
forced
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the forced
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 migration of
people
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as well as
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 the displacement and
demage
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damage
 to
human
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humans
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asserts
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has been a great concern of climate change and that solutions to solve
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 alarming issue must be implemented as soon as possible before it causes
further
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 damage.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accelerated glacial melt
  • coastal erosion
  • ecosystem degradation
  • salinity levels
  • thermal expansion
  • flood defenses
  • sustainable urban planning
  • renewable energy sources
  • carbon footprint reduction
  • climate-resilient infrastructure
  • desalination technologies
  • international cooperation
  • environmental stewardship
  • conservation efforts
  • adaptive strategies
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