The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in 1957 and 2007
A glance at the map provided the changes in the local
museum
at the north-east
corner of Hartford Street and Redclift Street in five decades from 1957 to 2007.
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northeast
Overall
, the area of the museum
was expanded as the garden became smaller and there was an additional car park space.
According to
the information shown on the map, the side of the entrance was revised to the side of the museum
shop which did not exist in 1957. Moreover
, there were other extra facilities such
as the education centre ,special exhibitions, a café, a reception and a car park with the removal of the national history exhibition and the museum
storeroom. What should be particularly mentioned is that the area of the garden was reduced in 2007 which
the local Correct word choice
and
museum
was surrounded by the garden in 1957.
To sum up
, it can be apparently seen that there were many extra facilities in 2007 and only the pace of the local history room was similar to its original one in 1957.Submitted by s99104032 on
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