The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The diagram illustrates the process of
apples
being canned.
Overall
,
apples
that have been collected from the trees will be transported and go through multiple steps of preparation before being canned and stored.
Initially
, the farmers hand-picked the
apples
and sent them to the factory by truck. When they arrive, they need to be washed first before getting into a quality check. If it has good quality,
then
it will be cold stored
while
waiting for the grading process. From
this
point, the
apples
are peeled and sliced into smaller cuts. Later on, these pieces are going to be put inside a sealed can and continued to sterilization or cooking step in order to make sure it is safe from germs. Once it has been sterilized, a label is stuck over the can before being wrapped and stored.
At the end
of the process, the stored can is grouped and despatched into several boxes.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words apples with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • canning process
  • systematic nature
  • ripe apples
  • preservatives
  • sterilization
  • distribution
  • technology-intensive
  • longevity
  • quality control
  • packaging
  • hygiene standards
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