The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018
The given line graph represents the quantity of
shops closure
and Fix the agreement mistake
shop closures
opening
in a particular country in seven consecutive years, starting from 2011.
Fix the agreement mistake
openings
Initially
, The number of new shops
opening started at the
higher point than those that closed, at 8,500 Correct article usage
a
shops
. Then
, there was a drastically
decrease in 2011 but gradually rebounded in the next two years. In 2015, it Change the word
drastic
was
dropped again to the same level as 2012 and remained steady until fell to the lowest point of only 3,000 Unnecessary verb
apply
shops
opened
in 2018.
The Wrong verb form
opening
shops
that closed had
fluctuated Unnecessary verb
apply
since
2011 to 2014. After Change preposition
from
that
it had significantly trough the dip in 2015, at approximately 800 Add a comma
that,
shops
. In 2016, the number had considerably risen at
around 5,000 Change preposition
to
shops
and remained stable for the next two years.
In conclusion, there was a fluctuation in both the shops
closure and opening. Change to a genitive case
shop's
shops'
However
, It can be indicated that there were
a downward trend for shop opening over the same period.Change the verb form
was
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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