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The graph shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The graph shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
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A glance at the line chart provided the demographic changes from 1940 to 2000 in three different areas including Columbia, Yamhill and
Washington
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 in the
Untied
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United
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 States of Oregon.
Overall
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, the population of the three
countries
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 kept rising in the six decades and that of
Washington
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 was significantly superior to that of the rest two
countries
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 in the given time.
According to
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 the information shown in the graph, the population of
Washington
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 was much higher than that of the rest two
countries
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 in 1940
which
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 the gap was over 45
thousands
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thousand
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.As the tendency kept growing, the population of
Washington
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 skyrocketed to 241
thousands
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thousand
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 in 2000 which was 4 times as many as that of Columbia in the meantime.
On the other hand
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, the number of citizens who lived in Yamhill witnessed a 2.5
-
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times growth in the
mentoned
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mentioned
 period which was from 20 thousand people to 15 thousand people.
To sum up
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, it can be apparently seen that the demographic rank of the three
countries
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 did not change.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words washington, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • growth rates
  • economic opportunities
  • migration patterns
  • environmental conditions
  • rapid growth/decline
  • industrial development
  • natural disasters
  • governmental policies
  • historical data
  • economic conditions
  • environmental sustainability
  • technological advancements
  • social implications
  • economic implications
  • environmental implications
  • infrastructure demands
  • natural resources
  • community life
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