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The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.

The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
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The provided map
display
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displays
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 the significant changes in the public
museum
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 at the local road
of
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on
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north-east
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the north-east
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 corner of
hartford
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Hartford
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 street and
redcliff
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Redcliff
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 street ,over
a
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apply
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three
seperate
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separate
 years starting from 1957, 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, the
museum
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 developed substantially from a
little
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small
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 facilities area to a high
atrracting
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attracting
 tourists zone over the
fifty-years
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fifty-year
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 period.
Likewise
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, the new construction and amenities increased,
along with
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 the area's capacity to
provides
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 for tourists. In 1957,
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the museum
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museum
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museum's
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 inner construction was tiny with few rooms, where
entrance
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the entrance
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 hall was directly connected with
history
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the history
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 room and store room through
main
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the main
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 road.
In contrast
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, there
was
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were
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 ample
of
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apply
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trees which
makes
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made
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 the garden view fascinating.
However
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, the
museum
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 has changed dramatically, the entrance gate had been blocked
inorder
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in order
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 to make car parking. Trees are
defforested
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deforested
 and enlarge the size of rooms.
Likewise
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, students had been
facilited
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facilitated
 with
cafe
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a cafe
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 and educational
center
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. The
museum
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 shop had been built on the north side of the garden.
On the other hand
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, the gallery had preserved the local history room.
To sum up
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, the collection of
arts
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art
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had
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has
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 changed and expanded exponentially over the given timeframe.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "likewise".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attract a broader audience
  • infrastructure
  • interactive displays
  • virtual tours
  • environmental sustainability
  • community engagement
  • strategic partnerships
  • inclusive exhibitions
  • accessibility
  • branding and marketing strategies
  • evolution
  • maintain relevance
  • appeal
  • differently-abled visitors
  • cultural institutions
  • educational organizations
  • joint exhibits
  • exchange programs
  • green spaces
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