The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.

The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
The maps show how the Local
Museum
that
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located at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street was transformed from 1957 to 2007.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the
museum
became larger in 2007
due to
the building
construction's
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expanded
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. In terms of the older building in 1957, the local
museum
had 4 main
rooms
. The first one was an entrance hall which
located
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in the centre of the building. The east
side
of the entrance hall was a
museum
store-
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storeroom
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room
, and the west
side
was a local history
room
.
Moreover
, there was a national history exhibition
room
just above the other three
rooms
.
In addition
, the local
museum
building was surrounded by
garden
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. Regarding the new look in 2007, the local
museum
had 5
rooms
and a car park.
First,
the
museum
visitors could have an entrance from a
museum
shop
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than
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went
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to a reception
room
by
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right. From the receptionist, the visitors could go to the east
side
to a cafe or to the north
side
to a local history
room
.
Furthermore
, there were two other
rooms
, a special exhibition
room
and an education centre
room
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attract a broader audience
  • infrastructure
  • interactive displays
  • virtual tours
  • environmental sustainability
  • community engagement
  • strategic partnerships
  • inclusive exhibitions
  • accessibility
  • branding and marketing strategies
  • evolution
  • maintain relevance
  • appeal
  • differently-abled visitors
  • cultural institutions
  • educational organizations
  • joint exhibits
  • exchange programs
  • green spaces
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