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The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.

The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
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The maps show how the Local
Museum
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located at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street was transformed from 1957 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the
museum
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 became larger in 2007
due to
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 the building
construction's
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expanded
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. In terms of the older building in 1957, the local
museum
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 had 4 main
rooms
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. The first one was an entrance hall which
located
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 in the centre of the building. The east
side
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 of the entrance hall was a
museum
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store-
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storeroom
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room
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, and the west
side
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 was a local history
room
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.
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, there was a national history exhibition
room
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 just above the other three
rooms
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.
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, the local
museum
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 building was surrounded by
garden
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a garden
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. Regarding the new look in 2007, the local
museum
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 had 5
rooms
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 and a car park.
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the
museum
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 visitors could have an entrance from a
museum
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 shop
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and than
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than
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then
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went
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go
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 to a reception
room
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 by
turned
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turning
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 right. From the receptionist, the visitors could go to the east
side
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 to a cafe or to the north
side
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 to a local history
room
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.
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, there were two other
rooms
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, a special exhibition
room
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 and an education centre
room
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, rooms, side, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attract a broader audience
  • infrastructure
  • interactive displays
  • virtual tours
  • environmental sustainability
  • community engagement
  • strategic partnerships
  • inclusive exhibitions
  • accessibility
  • branding and marketing strategies
  • evolution
  • maintain relevance
  • appeal
  • differently-abled visitors
  • cultural institutions
  • educational organizations
  • joint exhibits
  • exchange programs
  • green spaces
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