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students should pay their full universities fees themselves as they benefit from having university studies and not the society as a whole. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #universities #fees #benefit #university #studies #society
Some people argue that must pay
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whole
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scholars
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 bills by themselves and
governments
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that governments
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do
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are
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 not responsible
to pay
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for paying
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 for them.
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don
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do
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 not agree with the
intend
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 because governments take high taxes for educational purposes and the human rights agreement
ensure
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 that anyone
have
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right
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 to receive learning. In
this
article
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 I will discuss
this
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 two points.
Firstly
, governments in each country take a lot of money from people for educational purposes.
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, when authorities put budgets, they are specifical
branch
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 which
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 students who want to read . So , it is not reasonable logic when some individuals say that students
supposed
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 to fund themselves.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of educational institutions
provide
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 their service by paying money,
on
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this
 situation without any doubt
any
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one
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anyone
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needs
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 to read in , should be paid.
On the other hand
, the human rights charters obliged any state to offer free education for
the
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young people.
Moreover
, if we
are imposed
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impose
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 fees that will
lead to
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prevent a lot of
youngest
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the youngest
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 from education.
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Task Achievement
Work on creating a clear introduction and conclusion. The introduction should paraphrase the question and state your opinion clearly. The conclusion should summarize your main points and reiterate your opinion.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a logical flow. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and the subsequent sentences should support that idea. Use linking words to connect your ideas.
Task Achievement
Provide specific examples to support your arguments. This could be from personal experience, historical events, or hypothetical situations. Specific examples make your argument more persuasive and engaging.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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