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Autistic kids are difficult to handle. Do you agree or disagree

There is an ongoing debate that young people with autism are difficult to care for. In
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 view owing to the widely reported behavioural concerns, but I am
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 aware of the diverse nature of people with
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 condition, and the improvement in technologies that help to manage it. On the one hand, supporters of
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 view argue that children with autism require specialised care, since some of them are unable to communicate their needs clearly to carers.
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 breakdown in communication is what research usually attributes to emotional distress for some children, leading to concerning behaviours, eighty per cent of which are said to improve once communication patterns improve. Based on
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, it seems logical to believe that they are difficult to handle.
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 consider their diagnoses to refrain from judgmental and stereotypical argumentation. Many in the lower-level spectrum tend to perform everyday tasks independently and communicate with ease.
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, even those in the higher spectrum can be supported with the aid of technological and other behaviour support mechanisms, which are rapidly improving in contemporary society.
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, one cannot generalise the difficulty of working or living with young people with
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 condition. In conclusion,
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 many indicators justify the challenges of caring for kids with autism, equally observable is evidence of advances in technology and behaviour support mechanisms to ease the process. I argue for balance, to acknowledge the evolving nature of care and the diversity of children falling into
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structure
Make your view clear in the first paragraph. State your position and plan.
content
Give one clear example for each idea to show support.
language
Use simple words and avoid hard phrases like 'lower-level spectrum'.
grammar
Break long sentences into smaller ones; check the flow.
structure
Finish with a short end that restates your view.
argument
You show a clear view that you partly agree.
structure
You use 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to link ideas.
content
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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