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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The diagram gives
digitals
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 information about the production of milk in four countries in three different years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the Netherlands had the highest numbers in the three periods.
However
, Guatemala has the lowest numbers in the three periods. The unit is the litres.
To begin
, the Netherlands had produced around 11
million
 litres of milk in 1990 before it went down by 100
thousand
 litres in the next
decade
then
 it rose to 11
million
 and a half in 2010.
Likewise
, Australia achieved around 11
million
 in the first period. Following that, it declined by 150
thousands
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thousand
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 in the next
decade
 before it plunged sharply to 9
million
 in 2010. Tanzania had
really
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 small number of production of milk with 87
thousand
 in the first
decade
 and it went up to nearly double with 142
thousand
 in 2000 before it increased again to 155
thousand
 in
last
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 period.
similarly
, Guatemala had a very weak number with 26000 in 1900 before it rose to 55000 in the next
decade
 and
then
 it picked up to 84000 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, thousand, decade with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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