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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.
#indicators #four #countries #nations #statistics #information
This
 table depicts information about economic indicators
also
social
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the social
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 side in four countries which
is
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are
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Canda
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Canada
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,
Japan
, Peru and Zaire in 1994.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the
rate
 of Daily calorie supply per person
were
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was
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in
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an
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 increase in all the countries
whereas
 Life expectancy at birth
as well as
 Adult literacy
rate
 (%) were experienced
dramaticall
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dramatically
dramatic
 decline.
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According
Acording
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According
 to what is shown, the highest
rate
 was in
Japan
 in Annual
in
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apply
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come pen
person
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per person
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 in $ US Smiliarly in
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Life
Iife
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life
 expectancy at birth
were
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was
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 78,In spite of the rose in
Japan
 in
Daliy
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Daily
 calorie supple
pen
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per
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 person were rapidly rise ,
Canda
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Canada
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 has 3326,
last
 but not least
Canda
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Canada
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 and
Japan
 were
relative
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relatively
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 similar in Adult literacy
rate
 (%) experienced sharply rose
furthermore
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Furthermore
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 Zaire experienced sightly change
by
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over
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 time.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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