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The bar chart below gives information about the sales of electric cars in china, Europe and the United States between 2016 and 2023.

The bar chart below gives information about the sales of electric cars in china, Europe and the United States between 2016 and 2023.
The bar chart titled “Electric car
sales
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” illustrates the
sales
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 figures of electric
vehicles
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 sold in
China
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,
Europe
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 and the United
States
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 from 2016 to 2023.
Overall
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, except for 2020
China
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 consistently had the highest
sales
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amongst
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 the three regions,
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Europe
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 showed a gradual increase in
sales
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 over the period. The US,
on the other hand
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, showed fluction in
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 over the time period. In 201,
China
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 led the emerging EV market with a
sales
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 figure of almost 0.25
million
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 units, significantly surpassing both the US and
Europe
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.
Sales
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 figures for
Europe
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 and the United
States
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 were almost similar, showing a considerable gap compared to
China
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. Moving in 2017, There was a slight increase in
sales
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 of all regions with
China
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 maintaining its lead by selling around a half
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vehicles
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whereas
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sales
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 in the United
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 were stagnant. By 2023
China
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 continued to dominate the global
sales
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 of electric
vehicles
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, selling close to a
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million million
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.
Europe
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 experienced a
further
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 rise in
sales
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 to reach almost 3.5
million
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 units demonstrating a steady increase over the years. The USA
however
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 observed the slowest growth with
sales
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 figures reaching about 1.5
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 units which makes
China
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 the market leader followed by
Europe
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 and the the United
States
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, vehicles, china, europe, states, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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