The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters traveling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters traveling

each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
The graph illustrates the average number of UK daily
travelers
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travellers
show examples
on a basic day by
transportations
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transportation
show examples
such
as
car
,
bus
or
train
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trains
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over the
period
of 60
years
.
Overall
,
The
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apply
show examples
commuting by
car
and
train
have
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has
show examples
a tendency
of
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to
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growth
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grow
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,
while
bus
usage has
decline
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declined
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over the
last
years
Correct quantifier usage
few years
show examples
.
In addition
,
Car
usage is a positive line with hitting the highest point during
this
period
show. As can be seen over the
period
of 30
years
first showed the difference
of
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between
show examples
commuting by
bus
with the rest
transportation
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of transportation
show examples
. In that, the number of people
commuted
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commuting
show examples
by
bus
went down gradually in
this
period
.
However
,
a
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the
show examples
wide range of commuters
used
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who used
show examples
car
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cars
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increased relatively in 10
years
first,
after
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and after
show examples
that, it climbed up rapidly. And
train
usage has the relative same tendency
with
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as
show examples
people by
car
. Next the
period
between 2000 to 2023,
this
can be seen transportation by
car
and
train
had the tendency
of remaining
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to remain
show examples
almost stable from 2000 to 2010.
However
, both
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
grow rapidly the great number of people during the
period
of 20-
years
, especially for
car
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cars
show examples
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
show examples
a peak of highest commuters, at around 9
millions
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million
show examples
.
While
the
Correct quantifier usage
number of travelers
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travelers
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travellers
show examples
by
bus
declined constantly for the rest of the
period
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, train, period, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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