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The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed in 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed in 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph expresses the differences between
three
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the three
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crimes
 and the number of cases committed
in
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between
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 1970 and 2005 in
England
 and
Wales
.
According to
 the given graph, there were three kinds of
crimes
:
car
theft
,
house
burgling
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burglary
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and
street
robbery
.
Overall
, in 1990
car
theft
 increased rapidly
then
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than
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 in 1995 decreased gradually. In 1970
house
 burglary rose sequentially
then
 in 1995 declined moderately.
Street
robbery
 had standability
in
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from
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 1970 to 1990
then
 went up quickly.
Conforming
Verb problem
According
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 to the information
since
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from
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 1970 to 2005
in
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apply
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England
 and
Wales
 experienced many
car
 thefts.
However
,
in
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from
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 1990 to 1995
car
theft
 went up speedily, in 1995 in
England
 and
Wales
 1.6
milion
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million
car
crimes
 took place. Even so, in 1995
car
theft
 reduced from 1.6
million
 to 1
million
.
In
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From
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 1970 to 1980, there were 0.2
million
 to 0.6
million
house
burglary
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burglaries
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.
Nonetheless
,
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from
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in
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from
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 1980 to 2005 the number of
house
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burglaries
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burglary
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burglaries
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 did not rise.
In
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From
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 1970 to 1990 in
England
 and
Wales
 there were
not
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no
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street
robbery
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robberies
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 but in 1990 started
street
crimes
.
Nevertheless
, in 2005 only 0.2
million
of
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apply
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steet
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street
robbery
Fix the agreement mistake
robberies
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 were recorded.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, england, wales, car, theft, house, street, robbery, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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