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Human activities have negative effects on the plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this question. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many believe people have
created
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bad
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a bad
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 impact
to
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on
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species
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in
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of
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plant
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plants
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 and
animal
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animals
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 and it is too late to tackle
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 problem.
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, others think there are solutions to solve
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.
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 these two views. On the
on
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one
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 hand, there are countless animals and plants went extinct caused by humans.
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 massive industries activities, especially conventional
one
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ones
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 like wood, energy,
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and electricities
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electricities
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 which are basic necessities for life.
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cutting-trees
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cutting trees
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 and
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 the forest completely empty will eventually make the environment's equilibrium
inbalance
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imbalance
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. Some animals lose their source of food and place to live
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.
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, the practice sometimes
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done in some remote
areas
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 where specific
species
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 are living like in Kalimantan which is the only place where orang utan
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.
In
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result
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, it makes them lose their home and their food.
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, governance
need
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 to take action in order to limit
the
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human activities. The authorities should build rules and
limit
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limits
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 for these
indutries
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industries
 to do their business in the
nature
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areas
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.
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, it will benefit both
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humans and other
species
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.
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, oil companies could only dig
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into
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 specific
areas
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 that are set by specific
organization
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organizations
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 that focus on
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 problem. Not only that, the companies should
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 apply for
time-permit
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time permits
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 like 5 years in specific
areas
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 which will give the area time to recultivate again. In conclusion,
negative
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the negative
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 impact has been done by
human
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humans
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to
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species
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due to
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 companies' greed. It is too late for some of them, but in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 the government could take measures to reduce the damage or even create better
policy
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policies
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 to bring better life quality among humans, plants, and animals.

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task achievement
Ensure that your essay directly addresses all parts of the task. Your introduction should clearly state what viewpoints and solutions will be discussed, followed by comprehensive exploration in the body paragraphs. Clearly articulate your own opinion in the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of your essay by using a range of cohesive devices appropriately. Develop paragraphs that logically follow from one to the next, ensuring your ideas are well linked and your argument progresses smoothly.
language proficiency
Incorporate varied sentence structures and a wide range of vocabulary to articulate your ideas more effectively and engagingly. Doing so will improve the readability and impact of your essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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