Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, In
the
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apply
of
working, Change preposition
apply
have
many think about Unnecessary verb
apply
work
some people think working in one organisation
is the best and some workers think the rotation of work
is the best way to up skills and a new challenges, Both opinions are accepted in society, In this
essay, I will discuss both point of view and my personal opinion.
First of all, I think that working in the same or on
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one
organisation
only has an advantage for instance
you receive promote to up-level from your boss and up salary higher. You have a good experience and nice skills for a specialist. last
example you have a new project to challenge skills and hold a project. Whereas
,the disadvantage of a worker in the same organisation
are
you have many Correct subject-verb agreement
is
responsible
to consult a staff Replace the word
responsibilities
effected
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affected
to
stress Change preposition
by
illness
and sometimes you feel bored Correct word choice
and illness
about
routine Change preposition
with
work
.
However
, In my point of view about work
different organisations have positive thinking and negative thinking. In the positive think such
as you have a new environment to make your active to work
and you have a new skill to learn about new work
and you have a
many contacts to move to next your career path. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
On the other hand
, Moving of working has a disadvantage such
as the salary being stable when you start a new job and in some role structures of organisation
have a bad environment effect on you. It makes feel you do not enjoy to
Change the verb form
working
work
.
In conclusion, In my opinion, working in the same organisation
is the best way to promote
to the next level and you can manage and edit Wrong verb form
be promoted
row
in your office when you have a high position in the future.Fix the agreement mistake
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