Write about the following topic. In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Population
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of
world
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the world
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increasing on
daily
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a daily
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basis and
people
are enough educate
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are enough educated
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and understand that only
one
child is necessary for
life
span and they get the
baby
in
older
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an older
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life
. There are advantages of
one
child
such
as
people
can focus more on
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their carrier
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carrier
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career
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and get more freedom but we can't overlay the disadvantages of
this
where they have no
one
care
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to care
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in
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for in
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older
age
. I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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paragraphs.
People
more
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apply
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thinks
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think
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more
carrier
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career
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opperunities
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opportunities
after marriage so they can
fullfil
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fulfil
their dream first and
than
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then
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they think about the child.
First
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The first
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pros for
this
they have ample
time
to spend on
his
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their
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goal and can focus
to achieve
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on achieving
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the goal because if they
get
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have
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baby
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a baby
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they have less
time
to spend
their
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on their
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goal because they need to take
care
of
baby
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the baby
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until it gets mature.
For example
, famous celebrity
nina gupta
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Nina Gupta
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has no plan
of
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for
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her
baby
because she
want
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wants
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to
get for success
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be successful
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in
Bollywood
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her Bollywood
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carrier
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career
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. Moving
further
,
people
have extra freedom and they can spend some
time
with friends l. They don't worry about home because no
one
is
waiting
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waiting for
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them.
For example
, some
couple
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couples
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like to
do late
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have
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night
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late-night
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parties if they have
baby
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a baby
the baby
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they have to come
on
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home on
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time
at home. We
cannnot
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cannot
can't
neglect the cons of
this
because at elderly
age
people
don't
anyone
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have anyone
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who will take
care
of they get
baby
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a baby
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at
older
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an older
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age
. No
one
will
able
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be able
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to help in hard
time
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times
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such
as illness
time
.
Therefore
,
baby
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a baby
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at
good
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a good
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age
has
benefit
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benefits
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.
To conclude
, some
people
has
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have
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bigger
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a bigger
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goal
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goals
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in
life
which they prioritize so they can
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succeed
sussced
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succeed
in
life
and not think about the
baby
because they already have other stress related to
goal
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the goal
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but there are
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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if they do not have
in
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at
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baby
early
age
because they face
concequnse
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consequence
that no
one
will take
care
in older
age
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