Write about the following topic. In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
Population
of Add an article
The population
world
increasing on Add an article
the world
daily
basis and Correct article usage
a daily
people
are enough educate
and understand that only Change the verb form
are enough educated
one
child is necessary for life
span and they get the baby
in older
Correct article usage
an older
life
. There are advantages of one
child such
as people
can focus more on Correct pronoun usage
their carrier
carrier
and get more freedom but we can't overlay the disadvantages of Correct your spelling
career
this
where they have no one
care
Fix the infinitive
to care
in
older Change preposition
for in
age
. I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages in upcoming
paragraphs.
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the upcoming
People
more
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apply
thinks
more Change the verb form
think
carrier
Correct your spelling
career
opperunities
after marriage so they can Correct your spelling
opportunities
fullfil
their dream first and Correct your spelling
fulfil
than
they think about the child. Correct your spelling
then
First
pros for Correct article usage
The first
this
they have ample time
to spend on his
goal and can focus Correct pronoun usage
their
to achieve
the goal because if they Change preposition
on achieving
get
Verb problem
have
baby
they have less Correct article usage
a baby
time
to spend their
goal because they need to take Change preposition
on their
care
of baby
until it gets mature. Add an article
the baby
For example
, famous celebrity nina gupta
has no plan Correct your spelling
Nina Gupta
of
her Change preposition
for
baby
because she want
to Change the verb form
wants
get for success
in Replace the word
be successful
Bollywood
Correct pronoun usage
her Bollywood
carrier
. Moving Correct your spelling
career
further
, people
have extra freedom and they can spend some time
with friends l. They don't worry about home because no one
is waiting
them. Add the preposition
waiting for
For example
, some couple
like to Fix the agreement mistake
couples
do late
Verb problem
have
night
parties if they have Correct your spelling
late-night
baby
they have to come Add an article
a baby
the baby
on
Rephrase
home on
time
at home.
We cannnot
neglect the cons of Correct your spelling
cannot
can't
this
because at elderly age
people
don't anyone
who will take Add a missing verb
have anyone
care
of they get baby
at Correct article usage
a baby
older
Add an article
an older
age
. No one
will able
to help in hard Add a missing verb
be able
time
Fix the agreement mistake
times
such
as illness time
. Therefore
, baby
at Correct article usage
a baby
good
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a good
age
has benefit
.
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benefits
To conclude
, some people
has
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have
bigger
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a bigger
goal
in Fix the agreement mistake
goals
life
which they prioritize so they can Correct your spelling
succeed
sussced
in Correct your spelling
succeed
life
and not think about the baby
because they already have other stress related to goal
but there are Correct article usage
the goal
disadvantage
if they do not have Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
in
Change preposition
at
baby
early age
because they face concequnse
that no Correct your spelling
consequence
one
will take care
in older age
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Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure to have a clear structure in your essay, including an introduction with a thesis statement, developed paragraphs for each main point, and a clear conclusion that sums up your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to organize ideas logically, with clear transitions between paragraphs to guide the reader. This helps in enhancing the readability and flow of the essay.
Task Achievement
Address the task fully by discussing both the reasons for people having their first child at an older age and weighing the advantages and disadvantages thoroughly. Make sure to answer all parts of the question.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your points. These examples should be detailed and relevant, showing how they directly relate to the points being made.
General Advice
Work on grammatical accuracy and range, as well as spelling and punctuation. Errors in these areas can make your essay difficult to understand.
General Advice
Consider expanding your vocabulary and using a wider variety of sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and to more effectively convey your ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite