You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: give details about the concert describe how you won the tickets explain why you’ve chosen your friend to go with you.

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Dear friend, With thoughts of you in mind, I pen
this
letter, wishing for your well-being. we both have a common interest in music and admire going to live music concerts.
I've
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I have
I have got
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a exciting news
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exciting news
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for you, I won two
pass
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for
the
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apply
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Charlie Puth's live concert gonna be held
in
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the downtown on 26th
March
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evening. You may remember,
from
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last
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few
weeks
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I'm
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following a ritual. As I
recieve
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receive
my salary, I Put some share out to buy lottery tickets.
Although
, I wasn't
luckly
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lucky
luckily
enough in past
but
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this
time I made a cut and won the concert tickets. I can't describe in words how happy I was at that time. You know what as soon as I won the tickets, I quickly
start
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thinking of you. I believe we'll enjoy
this
music concert.
Also
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its
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it's
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been a long time
I
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since I
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saw you, so I think we can get some to make our bond even stronger. Please let me know if you are coming. Try to be there we'll enjoy
best
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of both worlds, I'll waiting for your reply.
Untill
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Until
we
met
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, sending positive vibes
yours
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your
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way. Kind regards, Sameer Rana.
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Grammar and Spelling
Make sure to proofread your letter for any spelling or grammatical mistakes. For example, 'pass' should be 'passes', 'luckly' should be 'lucky', and 'I Put some share out to buy lottery tickets' should be rephrased for clarity. Ensuring proper grammar and spelling will significantly improve the readability of your letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, consider transitioning more smoothly between paragraphs. Use linking words or phrases such as 'Furthermore', 'Additionally', or 'Consequently' to make your letter flow better from one idea to the next.
Task Response
Try to elaborate more on why you chose your friend to go with you to the concert, beyond just your shared interest in music. Including personal anecdotes or specific qualities of your friend can provide a more complete response and personalize your letter further.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • concert details
  • artist/band name
  • date and time
  • location
  • guest performances
  • unique venue
  • concert theme
  • contest
  • raffle
  • promotion
  • shared interests
  • past experiences
  • attending concerts together
  • personal reasons
  • winning tickets
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