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Write a letter to the school to apply to be a volunteer. In the letter: - Introduce yourself and give details of your children who attend the school - Explain why you are interested in the position - Talk about any relevant experience that you have with children

#school #volunteer #children #position
Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. My name is John, father of Robin studying at your
intsitute
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institute
 in 6th grade. Yesterday, Robin informed me
about
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that the school is going to organize a tree plantation camp in our neighbourhood to foster the significance of trees among children and community members. I am really excited
for
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this
 drive and willing to volunteer.
From
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last
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the last
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 few weeks, I
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extremly
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extremely
 stressed
due to
 some personal issues and the workload. I feel attending and volunteering at
this
 camp will mitigate my stress level and will allow me to spend some quality time with my son and
community
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.
Lastly
, I want to add that I have previous volunteering
exprience
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experience
 too. I worked for the XXX NGO that raise funds for children affected
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 cancer for six months. I worked as a
counsler
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counsellor
, my duties were to motivate children, teaching them to tackle depression and many others. I hope you will consider
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. I have submitted my application for the aforementioned role to the administrative department of
school
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. Looking forward for a positive reply. Yours faithfully, John.
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task response
Ensure a clear and concise introduction by directly stating your purpose for writing in the opening paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas or sections of your content. This aids in better organizing your letter and maintaining a flow that is easy to follow.
task response
For a more professional tone, consider rephrasing casual expressions. For instance, 'I am really excited for this drive and willing to volunteer' could be rephrased as 'I am earnestly interested in the forthcoming tree plantation camp and am eager to offer my volunteer services.'
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the coherence of your letter by linking sentences and ideas smoothly using transitional words or phrases, thereby improving readability and flow.
general advice
Proofread your letter for any typographical errors to ensure clarity and professionalism in your communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dedicated volunteer
  • Community engagement
  • Positive impact
  • Youth mentorship
  • Skills development
  • Educational journey
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Meaningful contribution
  • Enriching experiences
  • Collaborative spirit
  • Flexibility and adaptability
  • Child welfare and safety
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