The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours of sunshine in three major cities.

The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours of sunshine in three major cities.
The line graph and the table
gives
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data on average
temperatures
and yearly
hours
of
sunshine
in
London
, New
York
and
Sydney
.
Overall
, the temperature patterns for
London
and New
York
are similar with the hottest weather being in July
while
the highest average temperature in
Sydney
is in January. The
sunshine
hours
in New
York
and
Sydney
are nearly the same and much higher than the figure for
London
. Looking at the monthly average
temperatures
in more detail, the changes in
temperatures
in
London
and New
York
show a similarity
although
the city in North America has warmer summers and colder winters. The average
temperatures
in both
London
and New
York
respectively peak at 23
degrees
and 29
degrees
in July,
whereas
January is the month when
Sydney
experiences the warmest weather with 25
degrees
. New
York
’s
temperatures
decrease to an average of around 5
degrees
in December/January, 3
degrees
lower than the figure for
London
,
while
Sydney
shows the lowest average
temperatures
in July, reaching just over 15
degrees
. As far as
sunshine
duration is concerned, New
York
and
Sydney
have relatively similar averages of 2,535 and 2,473
hours
respectively.
However
, the
annualy
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annual
average number of
sunshine
hours
across
London
stands at a much lower rate with 1,180
hours
per year.
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