Some people believe that having sport in schools is a waste of time and resources, whilst other people believe that sport in schools is a vital part of education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is thought by some that having
sport
as a subject
is not appropriate for schools
in terms of time and resources, whereas
the opponents of this
idea take the view that this
subject
plays a pivotal role in the teaching process. Although
the former concept can be true in some conditions as not all students
have an interest in sports
,and they prioritise the importance of other core lessons
, and not all schools
can afford to supply the whole pupils with quality facilities, I would argue that sport
has crucial effects on students
' physical development and releasing their stress.
On the one hand, some say that the sport
subject
is a waste of time and resources. They think that not all children in schools
have a thirst for doing sports
, and also
it is a tough thing to provide all of them with enough quality facilities due to
economic restrictions. Additionally
, they consider that time and funds should be allocated to core subjects such
as maths, chemistry, and biology. For example
, in my school there are some sports
facilities to work with, however
, not all students
use them. In contrast
, the number of labs and biological objects is extremely limited.
On the other hand
, opponents of this
idea say that sport
as a subject
is so essential in pupils' academic life. They believe that children in educational institutions can stay healthy by doing sports
, and in this
way, they can witness an increase in their physical abilities. Moreover
, only attending the same lesson over and over again and doing only written tasks can have detrimental effects on students
' mental well-being. However
, taking part in sports
lessons
can release their stress and enjoy together with
their mates. For instance
, in one city situated in Japan, a survey was conducted among students
attending sports
classes. As a result
of this
survey, compared with other students
participating in only core lessons
, the former pupils had a less stressful and hectic life due to
the value of sport
.
To sum up
, while
some argue that sports
lessons
are not necessary in educational establishments because of the importance of other subjects, financial constraints and considering all students
' interests, opponents of this
view, including me, believe that sport
is a must in schools
due to
improvement of physical abilities and avoiding stress.Submitted by writingbhos on
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task response
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