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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.
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The chart and table
provides
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provide
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 data about visitors
of
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to
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 Australian holiday
resort
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resorts
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.
Overall
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, the pie demonstrates
percentage
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the percentage
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 of residents of each country and the table gives us details about them.
To begin
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 with, the most popular tourists come from Asia, they make up 37
percent
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per cent
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 of the total. They are the only ones, who pick
5 star
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5-star
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hotel
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hotels
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 as
an
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apply
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accommodation,
on the contrary
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, Asians have the
smallest
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shortest
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 length of stay, just a week. Europeans are coming
next,
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with the number of 35, these
travelers
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travellers
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 prefer camping or caravan, their main activities are swimming and sunbathing and they choose to travel for
a
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the
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 longest period out of the table, 16 full days.
However
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, American tourists intend to stop in Australia for 2 weeks,
their
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and their
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 accommodation and choice of activity, to be exact sightseeing,
pretty
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are pretty
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 similar to Asians.
Although
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,
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apply
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 the percentage of tourists from other regions is only 10%, they take surfing as
movement
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a movement
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 and stay for at least 10 days.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourist influx
  • Peak season
  • Demographic information
  • Fluctuations
  • Duration of stay
  • Preferred accommodations
  • Analyze
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Compare and contrast
  • Speculate
  • Marketing campaigns
  • Management
  • Data
  • Notable
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