The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.
The chart and table
provides
data about visitors Change the verb form
provide
of
Australian holiday Change preposition
to
resort
. Fix the agreement mistake
resorts
Overall
, the pie demonstrates percentage
of residents of each country and the table gives us details about them.
Add an article
the percentage
To begin
with, the most popular tourists come from Asia, they make up 37 percent
of the total. They are the only ones, who pick Change the spelling
per cent
5 star
Add a hyphen
5-star
hotel
as Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
an
accommodation, Correct article usage
apply
on the contrary
, Asians have the smallest
length of stay, just a week.
Europeans are coming Correct word choice
shortest
next,
with the number of 35, these travelers
prefer camping or caravan, their main activities are swimming and sunbathing and they choose to travel for Change the spelling
travellers
a
longest period out of the table, 16 full days.
Change the article
the
However
, American tourists intend to stop in Australia for 2 weeks, their
accommodation and choice of activity, to be exact sightseeing, Correct word choice
and their
pretty
similar to Asians. Add a missing verb
are pretty
Although
,
the percentage of tourists from other regions is only 10%, they take surfing as Remove the comma
apply
movement
and stay for at least 10 days.Correct article usage
a movement
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