You are a member of a sports club. Write a letter to the club president about an event that will be organized. In your letter, you should tell - What it is - Who I am inviting - What my role is in this event
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I am Maryam
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Amini
holding
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to go
competitions
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the best swimmers Change preposition
to invite
of
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from
for holding
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to hold
this
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this competition
these competitions
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requests
competitions
in the best way.
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of coaching experience and Correct your spelling
years
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have achieved
successful
in Replace the word
success
this
field. I can
breed a lot of children that take many honorable
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honourable
position
in the country and world . so I am sure with
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positions
this
competition we can Change the verb form
be fined
fined
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find
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talented
company
in world Fix the agreement mistake
companies
completion
.
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competition
This
club needs some facility
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facilities
such
as clean water that we have to buy water refinery and equipment for performing swimming techniques in water . and need to recruitment some coach that can helping
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help
be helping
this
competitions
and buy swimming board .
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apply
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Greeting and Closing
Ensure that your letter starts with a proper greeting to the club president, such as 'Dear [Name]' or 'Dear Sir/Madam', and concludes with a suitable closing like 'Yours sincerely' or 'Best regards', along with your name. This will enhance the professionalism and politeness of your letter.
Logical Structure
Your letter would improve in clarity by organizing it into distinct paragraphs, each addressing a separate aspect: one for introducing yourself and your role, another for describing the event and who you're inviting, and a final one detailing your requests or needs for the event. Between paragraphs, use connectors or phrases to smoothly transition from one idea to the next.
Complete Response
To better achieve the task, ensure your letter comprehensively covers all required aspects: introducing the event clearly, detailing who is invited, and explaining your specific role and requests for the event. While you've touched on these points, further clarification and expansion would strengthen your response.
Suitable Writing Tone
Consider using a more formal tone suitable for writing to a club president. This can be achieved through the choice of words, sentences structure, and the overall level of formality. Avoid casual expressions and ensure proper use of punctuation and grammar.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Establish a clear theme for each paragraph to improve coherence. Begin with a topic sentence to introduce the paragraph’s main idea, followed by supporting sentences that elaborate on this idea, and conclude with a closing sentence that summarizes the paragraph or transitions to the next. This will make your letter more logical and easier to follow.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.