Nowadays transportation is a major problem in every developing city. Many people opine that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than in public transport system. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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spending more
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on public transportation because it helps to reduce
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of more public's
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or train on their regular routines imagine how many cars or
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way to preserve the environment.
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building
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and motorways because it tells the
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structure of the nation. When
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coming
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from another country to visit your country and they get broken,
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save the
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one place to another.
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can easily go to work on
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wait
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buses or trains.
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transportation is helpful for saving the natural habitat but building
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and
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on own vehicles
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for saving
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