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You borrowed an important textbook from a classmate last term. You now realize your classmate had returned home overseas and you still have the book. Write a letter to to him / her. In your letter: - apologize for the mistake - find out how important the book is to him / her - say what you will do

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Dear Tom, Hope you are doing well! I wanted to inform you that, I successfully graduated from my college
last
 month, especially, thanks to your textbook and you.
Firstly
, I wanted to apologise for not returning the Marketing coursebook on time, as per my promise. Honestly, my grandfather got sick and I urgently had to rush to another city
for visiting
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 him. Recently I realized that I've not returned
you
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the book back and you have left the country. Since I know
this
 textbook is very crucial in terms of the information it has and on top of that the handwritten notes that you've prepared inside it.
However
, I wanted to know that do you need it on an urgent basis or if you can wait for a
while
. As I'm planning to visit your city
this
 September. Anyways, if you want me to courier it, I can send
this
 straight away,
otherwise
, I'll bring it with me when
we'll be
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 meeting. Let me know, how
sooner
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soon
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 you want it. Once again sorry for
this
 inconvenience, I'll be waiting to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Nabiyeva Surayyo
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task achievement
To strengthen your letter, consider clarifying how immediately your classmate needs the book. This will ensure your response is fully developed in terms of task response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure paragraphs are well-developed with a clear and logical progression of ideas for better coherence.
suitable writing tone
Your letter has a polite and suitable tone for the context, effectively addressing your classmate.
logical structure
The structure of your letter, with clear paragraphs dedicated to apology, questioning the importance of the book, and offering solutions, demonstrates good coherence and cohesion.
greeting and closing
You successfully included a greeting and a closing in your letter, which is appropriate for the format.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Regret, Apologize, Inconvenience, Retaining, Sentimental value, Crucial, Propose, Solution, Mailing, Replace, Willingness, Costs, Acknowledging, Rectify
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