The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sprots between 2008 and 2014 and the second one shows the number of children who paticipated in three sports in Britain over the same period.

The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sprots between 2008 and 2014 and the second one shows the number of children who paticipated in three sports in Britain over the same period.
The line chart depicts information on the amount of expenditure on kid's sports in a month and the number of children who are interested in each section of sports. It can be split into two groups, parents' monthly payments and the number of participants. In general, it is obvious that parents concerned more and more over the years, about kids' activities.
Furthermore
, outdoor activity is the most popular trend for the young generation. First of all, family concerned about providing entertainment for their kids. In 2008, the expenditure began at 20 pounds, later surged significantly over four years till reached almost 35
at the end
.
On the other hand
, there are three different popular activities among the younger community, namely, Football, Athletics, and swimming. The highest position stood at more than 7.5 in 2008, and slower increased over time to merely 10.
Moreover
, the water activity was
also
on an upward trend, starting from roughly 2.5 to 4.
Lastly
, Athletics was the lowest and fluctuated over a period from 1 to a mere 5.
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