The cost of flying has decreased significantly over the last decade. This has made overseas travel much more accessible. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

It is known that the prices
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travelling using
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have been decreasing significantly, especially in the
last
decade.
This
phenomenon has its impact as travelling abroad becomes more accessible. In
this
essay, I will explain why on the one hand, it will bring benefit for the student and the company,
while
on the other hand
, it would be a drawback to the environment. Regarding
this
, the accessibility to travel abroad would increase human resources in one country. For the students,
this
convenience would give them international exposure, especially to gain knowledge from different places.
For instance
, more middle-income students in Indonesia are able to have short courses in Singapore, and
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costs are considerably inexpensive. Not only for the scholars
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the workers can
also
expand the opportunities and networking, which would be beneficial for their long-term careers. In
this
globalisation era, international collaborations are crucial and definitely sought after by many people, and low-cost travelling between countries would be beneficial for them.
However
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the airplane
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has been known as the most polluting form of transportation.
While
most airlines are promoting international routes and at the same time become favourable destinations to travellers, the gases emitted by those carriers would
also
increase. An hour's flight journey from Jakarta to Singapore would emit similar gases to a thousand miles by car. Suppose the number of routes has doubled as more people become frequent travellers,
then
contributing to
this
would bring a huge disadvantage to the environment, especially with global warming and the continuous rising of the earth's temperature. In conclusion, the reasonable prices offered by the airlines make travelling abroad more accessible.
While
access to travel abroad brings many opportunities and exposure for students and workers to expand their potential, it creates more environmental issues with its pollution.
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Task Achievement
Your essay provides a balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of the decreasing cost of air travel. To improve your task achievement score further, ensure that each advantage or disadvantage is followed by a detailed example or explanation to fully support your arguments, making your position clearer.
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Your logical structure is generally clear, but to enhance coherence and cohesion, consider using a wider range of cohesive devices beyond 'for instance' and 'however.' Try integrating phrases like 'on the other hand,' 'furthermore,' or 'in addition' to connect ideas more smoothly within and across paragraphs.
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