Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There are many arguments that there will be numerous issues related to society and real-world challenges if the residents are required to use another
language
in parallel with the official one. In
my perspective, Change preposition
From
i
don't really go for Change the capitalization
I
this
assertion because of two reasons that i
will mention below.
First of all, Change the capitalization
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the
second Correct article usage
a
language
can enrich a country in terms of economic
. Replace the word
economics
For instance
, in Malaysia, Mandarin, English and Indian are widely used beside
the mother tongue, so Change preposition
besides
this
helps Malaysia a lot in trading and exchanging smoothly with other nations through
the world which givesChange preposition
throughout
Malay
a huge Fix the agreement mistake
Malays
of
potential Change preposition
apply
chances
to improve their finance, Fix the agreement mistake
chance
relation
, Fix the agreement mistake
relations
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and economic
economic
. Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign Replace the word
economics
language
is privilege
, it costs no problems if we know how to exploit Add an article
a privilege
this
chances
and protect our origin.
Fix the agreement mistake
chance
Next,
knowing more than a language
will create amount
of job Add an article
the amount
an amount
opportunitie
. Take my acquaintance as an example, she was obligated Correct your spelling
opportunities
learning
Mandarin when she was Change the verb form
to learn
at
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in
kindergarden
. She didn't like it Correct your spelling
kindergarten
from
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at
the
first ; Correct article usage
apply
however
, this
was the main factor supporting her having her dream job in a big company when she grew.
In the modern city, the more languages you know the more flexible in job choices you have.
To summarize, as long as we can preserve our official Change preposition
up.
language
and cultural beauty, don't
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and don't
lead
it Verb problem
let
being
replaced by another Wrong verb form
be
then
I supposed
having one more Wrong verb form
suppose
language
plays a vital role. It will contribute
the country more diverse and erase many serious problems Verb problem
make
such
as unemployment instead
of bringing negative things.Submitted by trangtrnh548 on
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