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The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.

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The table depicts the proportion of children who have
problems
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 with different abilities in two primary schools between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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, there are big changes in the indicators of following
instructions
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 and concentration in
school
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 A,
while
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 in
school
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B
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, all rates are almost the same except for Spelling and Following
instructions
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.
Initially
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, in schools A and
B
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, the percentage of pupils who have some difficulties with handwriting and reading stood at 22% (
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 A), 8% (
school
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B
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) and 28% (
school
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 A), 7% (
school
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B
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) respectively. Over the next 10 years, they remained stable and finished the period at almost the same level in 2015. In 2005, the largest percentage of children faced
problems
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 with following
instructions
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 and concentration in
school
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 A, and the percentage of these pupils was 40% and 42%
inturn
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Then
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 these indicators suddenly decreased and finished the period at 18%. The rates of other
problems
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 were more than 30% in 2005 in
school
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 A, later, after 10 years, they accounted for around 22% in 2015. In
school
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B
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, the figure for
problems
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 with other abilities was more than 10%, and they did not change during the 10 years except for spelling and following
instructions
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. They stood at 5% and 6% respectively in 2005,
then
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 they doubled and reached 10% (spelling) and 12% (following
instructions
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at the end
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 of the whole period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words problems, instructions, school, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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