The diagram shows the process of how to make smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below gives information about the stages of procession products smoked
fish
.
It is clear that
there are 13 steps of
the Change preposition
for
fish
from the water to purchase in markets or groceries.
As can be seen from the diagram, firstly
, the fish
are caught in the oceans or the rivers, then
these are delivered to port
in order to Add an article
the port
freze
by a transport boat. The Correct your spelling
freeze
free
fish
continuely are throught
Correct your spelling
thrown
in to
fresh water and cut open to eliminate something not Join the words
into
need
. After some time, the Wrong verb form
needed
fish
are immeresed
in salt water Correct your spelling
immersed
mix
with yellow colouring before Wrong verb form
mixed
hunging
up in a smoking machine and packaged into boxes.
In the final stages of the process, after packing, once more Correct your spelling
hanging
a
frozen, the smoked Correct article usage
apply
fish
are kept in cold stores until they are ready to distributed
to stores where they can be sold.Add a missing verb
be distributed
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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