The diagram shows the process of how to make smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the process of how to make smoked fish.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below gives information about the stages of procession products smoked
fish
.
It is clear that
there are 13 steps
of
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for
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the
fish
from the water to purchase in markets or groceries. As can be seen from the diagram,
firstly
, the
fish
are caught in the oceans or the rivers,
then
these are delivered to
port
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the port
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in order to
freze
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freeze
free
by a transport boat. The
fish
continuely are
throught
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thrown
in to
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into
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fresh water and cut open to eliminate something not
need
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needed
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. After some time, the
fish
are
immeresed
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immersed
in salt water
mix
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mixed
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with yellow colouring before
hunging
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hanging
up in a smoking machine and packaged into boxes. In the final stages of the process, after packing, once more
a
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apply
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frozen, the smoked
fish
are kept in cold stores until they are ready to
distributed
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be distributed
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to stores where they can be sold.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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