The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts give
the
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apply
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information about United Kingdom
graduate
and postgraduate
students
and,
students
who did part-time
work
, voluntary,
further
study
and
unemployment
after leaving the university in 2008.
Overall
, number of postgraduate
students
was not as much as
graduate
students
.
Numbers
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The numbers
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of
further
study
and part-time
work
were greater than
other
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the other
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2 sections in both charts. Voluntary
work
was the least in both charts.
Further
study
of
graduate
students
was approximately 10 times more than in postgraduate pupils.
According to
number
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a number
the number
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of
graduate
people who
study
,
,
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apply
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voluntary
work
was nearly 9 times less than
further
study
which was 29665.
Numbers
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The numbers
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of part-time
job
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jobs
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and
unemployment
were close to each other.
According to
amount
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the amount
show examples
of postgraduate
students
, voluntary
work
was approximately 4 times less than
unemployment
which was 1625.
Unemployment
was nearly 1000 less than part-time
work
and
part-time
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the part-time
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job was not as much as
further
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a further
the further
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study
which was 2725.
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