The diagram below illustrates the carbon cycle in nature.

The diagram below illustrates the carbon cycle in nature.
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The diagram displays the circulation of
carbon
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dioxide in nature.
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,
carbon
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naturally cycles through the ecosystem via sun,
plants
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, waters and animals,
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emissions from
humans'
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activities may alter
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procedure.
Carbon
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dioxide in the air is absorbed by the oceans and vegetation on Earth.
Plants
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combine CO2 and sunlight to produce nutrition for themselves via photosynthesis. Organic
carbon
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enters the ground in two ways. The first is through waste matter from
plants
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and the second way is when the bodies of
died
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organisms decay.
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, it becomes fossils and fossil fuels by accumulating in the soil
years
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by
years
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. In general, the breathing from animals and
plants
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is released
to
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the atmosphere and forms a new
carbon
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cycle again.
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, the accumulation in Earth's crust is burned for energy by
human
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and there are tremendous emissions
emit
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into the air because of large amounts, only
tiny
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a tiny
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part of them can go into the cycle.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, plants with synonyms.
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