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The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The bar chart demonstrates the reason why students choose to study,
whereas
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 the pie chart depicts the cost of each course.
Overall
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while
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 the most popular reason behind studying is deemed interest in subjects , individuals are responsible for the highest course share. In terms of the bar graph ,
it is clear that
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 the adults choosing to study for interests in subjects have been reported 40 % ;
however
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 , students who select to gain qualifications is smaller by a narrow margin of 2 per cent which is nearly 38% . Individuals who want to improve their prospects of promotion and enjoy studying share the same amounts of percentage with 20 %. The least amount of percentage is responsible for meeting people which is 9%. In terms of the pie chart , it is evident that the monetary value of each course is comprised of individuals with 40% , followed by employers with 35
percent
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per cent

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 which ranks second place , and the remaining 25 % is accounted for
taxpayers
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by taxpayers

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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