The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The
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diagram illustrates the proportion of carbon dioxide emission to
atmosphere
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per individual in the UK,
Sweden
, Italy, and Portugal in 1967 and 2007.
Overall
, carbon dioxide emissions in Italy and Portugal rocketed up
while
the United Kingdom and
Sweden
plunged.
However
, the United Kingdom always had the highest metric
tonnes
throughout four decades.
Similarly
, Italy and Portugal had a low contribution in the first year,
therefore
making up around 4 and 1.7
tonnes
respectively.
Nevertheless
, Italy skyrocketed to 6
tonnes
between 1977 and 1997,
whereas
Portugal saw
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2
tonnes
rise from 1987 to 1997 correspondingly.
Furthermore
, those countries have gone up gradually and reached around 7
tonnes
in Italy and 5
tonnes
in Portugal.
On the contrary
, the United Kingdom and
Sweden
started up with approximately similar trends.
On the contrary
,
Sweden
between 1977 and 1987 saw a sharp decline
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almost 4
tonnes
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. By
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in the
last
year
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it leveled off with Portugal. The UK made up an upward tendency from 11 to 9 metrics,
however
, saved its first place in the emission rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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