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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The
supplies
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 diagram illustrates the proportion of carbon dioxide emission to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 per individual in the UK,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal in 1967 and 2007.
Overall
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, carbon dioxide emissions in Italy and Portugal rocketed up
while
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 the United Kingdom and
Sweden
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 plunged.
However
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, the United Kingdom always had the highest metric
tonnes
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 throughout four decades.
Similarly
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, Italy and Portugal had a low contribution in the first year,
therefore
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 making up around 4 and 1.7
tonnes
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 respectively.
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, Italy skyrocketed to 6
tonnes
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 between 1977 and 1997,
whereas
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 Portugal saw
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 2
tonnes
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 rise from 1987 to 1997 correspondingly.
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, those countries have gone up gradually and reached around 7
tonnes
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 in Italy and 5
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 in Portugal.
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, the United Kingdom and
Sweden
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 started up with approximately similar trends.
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,
Sweden
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 between 1977 and 1987 saw a sharp decline
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 almost 4
tonnes
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lose
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. By
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 in the
last
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 year
period
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 it leveled off with Portugal. The UK made up an upward tendency from 11 to 9 metrics,
however
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, saved its first place in the emission rate.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, on the contrary".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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