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Your English speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project helshe is doing about celebrating New year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Say how important New year is to people in your country Describe how New year is celebrated in your country Explain what you like about New year celebrations in your country

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Dear Miss Larry Smith, Hello, I hope you are well.I am writing
to
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how to describe
New
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the New
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Year
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 in my
country
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. I would like to write about New
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 is to how essential in my
country
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. First of all, we organize for
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chirstmas
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christmas
holiday
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 and buy a lot of
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present
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to
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children
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,we invite
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close friends and familiar. We will wait
New
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Year
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 during
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year
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Christmas
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holiday
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 is important
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country
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 so we celebrate every
year
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. We always celebrate
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holiday
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is
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every
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.
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, we buy a green tree and organize a
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christmas
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 present for
teen
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. After
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 our special guests.
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, we decided to concert and sing New
Year
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 songs.
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, many people
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 to a new ambition for next
year
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. If I explain what I like about
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the christmas
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christmas
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holiday
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 celebration
is
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my
country
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 is that I appreciate
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lot
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 a lot of gifts. My parents and best friends give me
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.
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this
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 books make me
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, I like to eat
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christmas
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 food. I cordially invite you
for
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christmas
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 table. I
am
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appreciate
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 if you accept my
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. I look forward to hearing you. Yours sincerely, Parizoda.
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structure
Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly around one main idea. This helps in making your letter easier to follow.
grammar
For a more natural flow, vary your sentence structures and pay attention to the consistent use of tenses throughout the letter.
content
Be attentive to the distinction between New Year and Christmas celebrations, as the prompt specifically asks about New Year.
personal touch
You've celebrated the festive spirit and explained how the celebration is personally significant to you, which is great.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are both nicely done, adding a formal and friendly touch to your letter.
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