Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A handful of people are of the opinion that fixed punishment for some
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like murder is the right way to go.
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, there are other people who argue that the nature of the
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committed should
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be taken into account. I will discuss both sides of
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and provide my perspective.
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with,
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penalty
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crimes
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, including major
crimes
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like murder and
drug
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trafficking, should be dealt with the worst penalties available. The reason it is done
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way is that it sets a strict stance to the public and anyone who has any kind of opinion is doing the same thing.
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will not only prevent any other similar wrongdoings
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but
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reassure everyone that the country does not tolerate these
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.
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, in my country,
Singapore
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, finding even the slightest trace of drugs in
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possession will call for jail time for
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traffickers or, worse, the
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penalty
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. These strict penalties have made
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one of the safest countries in the world. On the other side of the coin, it can be argued that certain situations can lead even the most law-abiding citizen astray. People who commit heinous
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may be in a bad place at a bad time and have no choice but to commit those acts.
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, a recently captured
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mule was forced to deliver
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packages from London to
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because his spouse was kidnapped by a
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mafia in his home country of Colombia.
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sparked a global call for the
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Judicial Council to reconsider the
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penalty
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awarded to him. Ultimately, in my opinion, all capital
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should be dealt with by a definite
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penalty
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such
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as life or
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for the sake of public safety and
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to act as a part of deterrence for future
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, I
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encourage all
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to be thoroughly investigated because there are certainly examples where an innocent person is doing something they did not do of their own free will but
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being forced and masterminded. He should be arrested and
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instead
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he should face
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punishment
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Clarity
Ensure a clear distinction between your personal opinion and the discussion of both views to enhance clarity.
Coherence
Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your essay.
Evidence Support
Be cautious with the use of hypothetical examples to support your arguments. Real-world statistics or studies add more weight and credibility.
Introduction & Conclusion
You've effectively introduced and concluded your essay, presenting a balanced discussion followed by a reasoned opinion.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay displays strong coherence, with a clear logical structure that guides the reader through your argument seamlessly.
Task Achievement
Use of relevant examples to support your points, enhancing your arguments. Incorporating real-world examples like Singapore's policies greatly strengthens your case.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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