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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the procedure of
plastic
bottles
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bottle
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 recycling.
Overall
, it is a cycle process
consist
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consisting
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 of nine steps,
begins
Correct pronoun usage
which begins
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 with
collect
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collecting
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 the
plastic
products
 and ends
by
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with
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 producing the recycled
products
. In the beginning, the process begins with collecting
plastic
 waste into a separate trash bin. The trash bin is transported regularly by dump truck to the recycling centre. In the recycling centre, the plastics are sorted to check
the
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their
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 quality,
then
 the
good quality
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good-quality
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 plastics are compressed into blocks. After that, the blocks are crushed into
a
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apply
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smaller pieces and collected in
big
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a big
the big
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 dump of water for cleaning purposes.
Subsequently
, the small pieces are conveyed to a machine to form into the
plastic
 pellets. The pellets are heated
in
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to
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particular
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a particular
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 temperature and created raw materials of recycled
products
.
In
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At
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 the end of
process
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the process
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, the raw materials are processed to create end
products
,
for instance
, recycled bottles, pens,
clothes
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and clothes
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.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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