Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebra;ng New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebra;ons in your country
Dear Katie,
The reason why I am addressing you is that I
want
give you some information about the best Add the particle
want to
holiday
, which is celebrated every year
. I am really excited to help you with your workload.
The famous "New Year
" holiday
has many attractive
Replace the word
attractions
towards
among other celebrities. The Change preposition
apply
holiday
has been waited every year
by all ages of people for its many entertainments. Every new year
bring
a lot of emotions and opportunities to people's lives. Change the verb form
brings
In addition
, some new work or plans will start when the new year
comes.
Furthermore
, celebrating the "New Year
" holiday
has different traditions in many countries. Which
is why, the majority of the population Correct pronoun usage
This
find
some Correct subject-verb agreement
finds
excited
things to celebrate the Replace the word
exciting
holiday
. And also
my country has own
traditions. Correct pronoun usage
its own
For example
, visited to
each Remove the preposition
apply
others
Change noun form
other's
home
, Replace the word
homes
prepare
many meals, Wrong verb form
prepared
give
and Wrong verb form
gave
take
different types of gifts , Wrong verb form
took
decorate
fir trees and Wrong verb form
decorated
wait
for Wrong verb form
waited
coming
new Correct article usage
the coming
year
until 12 a.m. without sleep. And also
dance at
Change preposition
on
street
with Add an article
the street
a street
neighbors
.
Change the spelling
neighbours
In addition
, taking a lot of presents from Snowman is always children's favorite
part. I have always appreciated my country's traditions. The most exciting point for me is making a cake for the " New Change the spelling
favourite
Year
" holiday
in the near future.
I would be grateful,
if you could provide some useful information after reading my letter.
Warm wishes,
NozigulRemove the comma
apply
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coherence and cohesion
Consider varying sentence structures to enhance flow and readability.
task achievement
Attempt to correct minor spelling and punctuation errors for an even clearer expression.
suitable writing tone
Excellent use of an engaging and friendly tone, appropriate for writing to a friend.
logical structure
Good structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
complete response
Effectively depicts the importance and celebration of New Year in your country.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite