Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebra;ng New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebra;ons in your country

Dear Katie,    The reason why I am addressing you is that I
want
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give you some information about the best
holiday
, which is celebrated every
year
. I am really excited to help you with your workload.  The famous "New
Year
"
holiday
has many
attractive
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attractions
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towards
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among other celebrities. The
holiday
has been waited every
year
by all ages of people for its many entertainments. Every new
year
bring
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a lot of emotions and opportunities to people's lives.
In addition
, some new work or plans will start when the new
year
comes.   
Furthermore
, celebrating the "New
Year
"
holiday
has different traditions in many countries.
Which
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is why, the majority of the population
find
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some
excited
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things to celebrate the
holiday
. And
also
my country has
own
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its own
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traditions.
For example
, visited
to
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each
others
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other's
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home
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homes
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,
prepare
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many meals,
give
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gave
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and
take
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took
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different types of gifts ,
decorate
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decorated
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fir trees and
wait
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waited
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for
coming
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the coming
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new
year
until 12 a.m. without sleep. And
also
dance
at
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on
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street
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the street
a street
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with
neighbors
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neighbours
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.   
In addition
, taking a lot of presents from Snowman is always children's
favorite
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part. I have always appreciated my country's traditions. The most exciting point for me is making a cake for the " New
Year
"
holiday
in the near future. I would be grateful
,
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if you could provide some useful information after reading my letter.   Warm wishes,   Nozigul
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coherence and cohesion
Consider varying sentence structures to enhance flow and readability.
task achievement
Attempt to correct minor spelling and punctuation errors for an even clearer expression.
suitable writing tone
Excellent use of an engaging and friendly tone, appropriate for writing to a friend.
logical structure
Good structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
complete response
Effectively depicts the importance and celebration of New Year in your country.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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