IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
#show #survey #adult #education #first #reason #adults #study #people #costs #report #university #lecturer #information
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
These graphs provide information about the
result
Fix the agreement mistake
results
show examples
 of
Correct article usage
the survay
show examples
survay
Correct your spelling
survey
 about adult education, the bar
graph
 shows the reasons
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
where
Correct word choice
why
show examples
adult
Fix the agreement mistake
adults
show examples
 decide to study,
along with
 the proportion of shared costs of adult education.
Overall
, it can be seen that each bar in the
graph
 shows a
percentage
 of each reason.
while
 the second
garph
Correct your spelling
graph
demonstarte
Correct your spelling
demonstrates
 a proportion of education costs that need to be shared. In detail, in
first
Correct article usage
the first
show examples
graph
Add a comma
graph,
show examples
 the interest in
subject
Correct article usage
a subject
show examples
 and
to gain
Change the verb form
gaining
show examples
 qualification demonstrate the highest
percentage
,
in contrast
 to
Correct article usage
the meest
show examples
meest
Correct your spelling
most
 people which shows the lowest
percentage
. Moving
in to
Join the words
into
show examples
 the pie
graph
,
individual
Correct article usage
the individual
show examples
 shows the highest
percentage
to pay
Change preposition
of paying
show examples
 the cost of
eductation
Correct your spelling
education
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
around 40%,
afterthat
Correct your spelling
after that
 is the employer
by
Change preposition
at
show examples
 around 35%,
the
Correct word choice
and the
show examples
 taxpayer
recoreds
Correct your spelling
records
recorded
 the lowest
percentage
.
Submitted by wjdan.areeshi on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, percentage with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 5 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: