The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram
showing
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shows
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process
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the process
a process
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of making
cheese
starting from
raw
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the raw
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materials of
cheese
. There were several
equipments
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equipment
were used to produce
cheese
starting with
mixer
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a mixer
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through
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apply
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mixing water and milk
then
mixing properly under suitable conditions temperature
5
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of 5
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degrees C , pressure and 2 hours of mixing to be homogeneous mixture after that next step would be cooling down
then
the salt was added to production line . The most important process fermentation which
converted
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converts
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raw materials to partial
cheese
the time and special conditioning must be considered temperature of 35 degrees C and 2 hours of sediment.The evaporator machine was designed to evaporate the remaining liquid from
production
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the production
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line through
this
method , the steam was released from
evaporator
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the evaporator
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based on temperature control
100
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of 100
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degrees and 8 hours
then
, specific measurements
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were
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set up the hear regarding to process setting. The
last
equipment was made to produce
cheese
, named cooler or distilled tower which many proceed occurred filtering
then
cooling and storage of products .
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