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The diagram below shows the plan of a medical centre in 2008 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the plan of a medical centre in 2008 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the diagram depicts a comparison between two maps of a specific medical centre and the
moderations
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happened
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 in two years from 2008 to 2010. In terms of 2008, the hospital's map consisted of three doctor's offices which were situated
at
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on
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 the
northern-side
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northern side
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 of the centre and beside the treatment room from the right. A long corridor was located
in
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on
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 the
northern-side
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northern side
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 of the staff office and the waiting area. Coming from the south of the
plan
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plane
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 there
were
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was
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 a main
imterance
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entrance
 and a reception. As for
2010
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the 2010
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 illustration,
it is clear that
 the number of doctor's offices increased corresponding to the rising number of healthcare providers. Those offices were followed by a store room exactly to the
right-side
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right side
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. To the
southern-side
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southern side
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 of
this
 new place, a
pharmcy
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pharmacy
 has been added to provide the needed medications
emidiately
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immediately
.
Moreover
, two other rooms have been opened (education and mother and child rooms) at the southern-west of the building.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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